The custom itself isn't really bad, per se, but there are a few things I want to talk to you about on this.
First and foremost, I'd like to let you know that your entire skill premise was how the OG Bala man himself got GM(?) in the skill, so what you're wanting to do can already be done within the realms of casting skills. I know you're not limited to just Cero/Bala, but it's the easiest to use given you're an Arrancar. So that in it of itself is reason enough to make this skill a bit redundant.
Secondly, how do you show actual growth and progression in a skill like this? It seems like any ways you'd try to justify a mastery, or her getting more skilled in something, could be very easily cluttered with the primary casting skill. "I can do things from further away" is very bland and hard to work with.
With those two points in mind, would you like to continue working on this, or nah?
Post by Verbrennung on Jan 16, 2018 16:35:27 GMT -5
fixed, also here are my powers mechanized. i'll need to fix the rp at some point as well.
EFFECT: Verbrennung possesses three Molten Charges. When attacked in melee range and a wound is inflicted upon Verbrennung, she may spend one Molten Charge to cause the super-heated blood in her body to spurt out (Resonance + Spirit vs their Hoho + Speed) and damage the enemy for no action cost.
EFFECT: When people move to/from Melee range, or are already present in melee range, Verbrennung may use two of her Molten Charges to scorch an opponent with her heat, with her check being Resonance + Spirit (target's check depends on their reaction: dispel the heat with an attack or dodge). This does not cost an action.
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